Very interesting start! I'd like to read more.

Yes I would like to see what happen and if you would continue the story, I would be interested to read more.

Sorry I sent that message too soon by accident, but I like your story. I didn't get to tell you that I can't wait to help with the next chapter. The next message will have the rest of my input but for now we wait. Dun dun dun. . .

Well it's kind of alright for a PWP. You might want to go have a beta reader take a look at this though. The dialouge should not be lumped together in one paragraph.