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| daretobe-dIfFeRnT 2008-03-12 ch 1,  | abuseawh are all of these about the same guy? you must really like him:) very nice! |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-27 ch 1, | abuseI like it too... the ending especially... short, sweet and ironic with good rhyming |
| Billie.Joelle 2008-02-27 ch 1, | abuseReview Game! I really like this one. I love the way all the lines are really short, but still manage to convey a lot of emotion, and still tell your story. I'm a little confused as to the rhyme structure, if there is one. The first four lines are "a b a b" and the last four are "a b c b" but the ones in the middle don't have any structure at all. Was this intentional? I don't know, but thats the only thing. It flows very nicely. I like it very much. Keep it up! ~BJ |
| Random-Idiocity 2008-02-27 ch 1, | abuseLove it! It may be short, but the rhyming makes up for that. Keep it Up! |