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ViolinsOfDoom 2008-02-29 . chapter 1
It's a good story, but I noticed a few typos here and there. Also some parts which don't seem likely to happen. I suggest that if you do the whole thing about place and time (CIA Headquarters; 6:56 AM), you do that type of thing throughout the story instead of saying 'later that night,'.
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