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| fleur de l'est 2008-02-29 ch 1,  | abuseGod be with us all. |
| Needa S 2008-02-28 ch 1, | abuseI love this one. I think we did a great job, Ninja! Write on, Bro. YSIC |
| writingxonxwalls 2008-02-27 ch 1, | abuseOo- very nice! The rhyming didn't seem forced at all, and I think you wrote about the whole topic so well that I got a good mental picture of what was going on. Great job!! I really liked the last two lines, "Forever we shall live fulfill the old, old story About the Savior who came and took us to glory" Awesome! Maybe if you added puncuation it could be easier to find the flow- but I really don't think that's truly needed at all. --WxOxW |