I know how much you guys hate anonymous reviews (or I think you do, I can't really remember), so this is my actual account name. I just wanted to say that Avery reminds me a lot of Artemis Fowl, except for the abuse part. That isn't bad or anything, (I love Arty) but it just cracks me up when they talk! Write more with him!
Just wanted to let you know, I always review the last chapter of a story. If there's a sequel, I review the last chapter of that instead. So, you're lucky you're hearing from me this early. Trying not to sound mean or anything...
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Thanx!
~Xandy

aww... i liked this chapter :) please update soon

This is a sweet story. I love Avery and Alistair. My sentences are depressingly short... but there's nothing to critque about this, it's so heartbreaking and sweet.

I loved this chapter and so can't wait for the next one. Keep up the great writing and please post more when you can.
Tanya

I really like the fact that you don't rush through important events, like many other authors do. you also don't exagerate wih descriptions, but what you have is enough to make the reader understand their feelings. and THANK YOU for NOT describing EVERY SINGLE PIECE OF FURNITURE in the house!
post the next one asap, BUT take your time, it would be a shame to hurry up (too much) and get a bad chapter
kitty

B R I L L I A N T !
keep it up, I'm waiting for the next chapter!
kitty

I actuly kind of know Dorain was feeling in this chapter. I have a 11 year old nephew the is in a childs phych unit. He as been in and out of there for the last four years they think he is schizophrenia and as you said they can't diganose him till he is an adult. The thought is terifying. You want to help him and you feel so helpless and lost because there is nothing you can really do. I talk to much sorry. Great chatper and I love this story. I can't wait to find out what is going to happen next. Keep up the great writing and please post more when you can.
Tanya

yey he is home :) such a cute ending to the chapter :) please update soon

aw! i seriously cried. :D

This was an author note. If it is. Is was one of the best author notes I read. I really like how about are exsplaining that is going on with Alistair. There are not many stories out there where the focus on what is going on with a sibling when a sibling dies or how that sibling break down or trying to cope with what is happening effects the others around them. You two have an amazing and factistic story here. Yes it has it's moments of sadness, but it also has it's moments where it is funny. And I still can't wait to find out how Avery is going to play into all of this. I think in some ways he is going to help them deal with what happen to Zoe but I also think that he might be able to help Alistair while they help him also. Keep up the great writing and please please please post more when you can.
Tanya

aww no... that is awful :( please say this will be over soon? please update soon

Hey I want to know why Allistair is flipping out. I so they knock the ** out of Dorian's mom if she shows up. Can she get hit by a bus. I loved chapter. Keep up the great writing and please post more when you can.
Tanya

drama drama drama lol. loving the chapter :) very dramatised very cool and i cant wait for the next one. please update soon!

i love this, it's amazing, (i have an account but can't remember what it is so am someone what glad your account allows for annonymous reviews.)

when can you get the next chapter up *is hyped*

I think it is so cool that they are going to take Avery in. It might really help them. I love Alistair's reaction to Avery and what Avery said to Jess. Great chapter and I loved it. Keep up the great writing and please post more when you can.
Tanya