Reviews for Misinterpretation

simpleplan13
2008-03-09
ch 1,

abuseI like the repetition of perfect in the first stanza and how you bolded the last line... that was really great... I like the last stanza is nice... kinda taunting someone to call you names, which is interesting

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Midnight In Eden
2008-02-29
ch 1,

abuseI think the main issue with this piece is telling vs. showing.

Right now you're telling us everything and showing us nothing which renders this piece a little dull.

Verbs and imagery push a poem and while you have a little of the latter, there's practically no action in this piece.

The main thing I would recommend if you want to revisit this piece is to make it specific, clear out the repetition of "perfect" and instead show us how it's all perfect.

Good luck,
Midnight

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