Great job on telling a story even if it is a sad story. Fitting title. Nice work. Keep writing!

Good luck with poetry and life. Have a lovely day and a brilliant summer.

~Twilight Starr~

the ending just made me mentally go, "aw." it's such a deep contrast to the rest of the poem, but written in such a way that it flowed so wonderfully. it's terrific.

Aww...The ending was great, lovie. It gives hope.