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| hoho4 2008-08-27 ch 2,  | abuseThis is quite interesting keep it up? |
| snicekrsx789 2008-07-11 ch 2, | abuseOMG this is amzaing! |
| DayAndNight 2008-05-31 ch 2, | abuseHmm... You have a wonderful idea in mind... after all, who doesn't love superpowered teens? But, you could do with some proofreading... there were some spelling errors. And also, for some advice, I must say: try not to introduce all your characters at once. Take time with your story: develop it. Think thoroughly about what you want to do, about your characters, about your plot and relationships between characters. Otherwise, though, I do very much love the idea. |
| GryffindorsQueen 2008-03-27 ch 2, | abuseI agree, very lame. Use descriptions. Ever heard of paragraphs? This is a story. Now make it one. 2/5 |
| Dream that was Life 2008-03-19 ch 2, | abuseI'm sort of half-interested in reading the next chapter. I'm interested to see how they react to their powers and each other, but there's also something about it that irritates me... I don't know what it is. Update soon, please, and I'll try to work it out! |
| BueJeanUnderpantsONgo 2008-03-16 ch 2, | abuseAh, cool introductions. |
| BueJeanUnderpantsONgo 2008-03-16 ch 1, | abuseI've only read chapter One, but I think its pretty good so far! I love greek mythology when people re-write it. We give it a sense of imagination and humor. Good job!! Looking forward to reading more. :) `Hey YOU! |
| Anarane Calafalas 2008-03-14 ch 2, | abuseIt was not lame. You portrayed all the characters and their personalities very well. I enjoyed it as much as the first chapter! |
| Anarane Calafalas 2008-03-14 ch 1, | abuseI love it! I am a mythology buff and the way you portrayed them is pure genius! I love your story, it's great so far! |
| Samaris Douglas 2008-03-13 ch 1, | abuse1. Artemis 2. Hermes 3. Hestia 4. Athena 5. Apollo 6. Zeus 7. Poseidon 8. Hera 9. Hephaestus 10. Demeter 11. Dionysus 12. Aphrodite 13. Ares 14. Hades |
| Nightmare EX 2008-03-11 ch 2, | abuseWell I know one thing for certain; I love this story and I don't like Lani.^^; Anyhow... the story's good. And because I'm not completely on track - it's going on midnight now - if Hephaestus is the one with the fake leg... mmh, I think it was good.X3(But that's coming from someone who enjoys making characters lose limbs are have some form of artificial one or something...) Anyway, it's awesome... can't wait to read more.^^ |
| puppyluv26 2008-03-11 ch 2, | abuseThis is my favorite story I have read on this site so far because it was not confusing at all! Good Job! Can you please review my story the slave's ghost? I really want someone to! |
| puppyluv26 2008-03-11 ch 1, | abusehere are my guesses: 1.Artemis 2.Hermes 3.Hestia 4.Athena 5.Apollo 6.Zeus 7.Poseidon 8.Hera 9.Hephaestus 10.Demeter 11.Dionysus 13.Aphrodite 14.Ares 15.Hades |
| Etece 2008-03-09 ch 2, | abuseHey great story! I really like the idea you've got going here, and the introductions so far have been good... I'm looking forward to the next part! I have only one complaint about the whole thing... Where's Eris?! Is the good Goddess to be snubbed again?! But then, what else would you expect an Erisian to say? :P Etece |
| Flammers 2008-03-08 ch 2, | abuseYay! I get a cookie! I alway liked Artemis and Athena the best, though I don't know why . . . I like the introductions. Diana has a secret compartment in a tree stump?? I need one of those . . . Do you have any ideas I could use to meka a secrt compartment in a tree stump? |