Reviews for Reflection: Year One

KnittingKneedle
2008-03-08
ch 1,

abuseThis review is brought to you by the review marathon, link on my profile

Well you should be applauded really, you picked the averagest of average persuits for a person on this site (lets face it we all surf the net, we all try to write and encounter writers block from time to time)and you wrote it in a way that was totally engaging which I wasn't expecting.

Your use of similie was very good, taking typical things and twisting them.

The only problem I have is that I prefer it when itallics are used instead of bold to add emphasis to words for example in "I just wanted a poem" I think it looks far more professional.

I'm always careful of what I write when reviewing a bigraphy because it is so personal to the author, because it is very much how you write it...because the plot is already there and can't be tweaked like a normal fiction story, but the grasp of language you have is so good that I know whatever the plot, the way you take a reader to it will be great!

xEmoMuffinx
2008-02-29
ch 1,

abuse"Artemis’ heart was kaleidoscope of emotions"

[...was a...]

"The two of us had so much in common, after all, she was my doppelganger."

[...common. After all...]

I liked how you described things; your metaphors and similes were quite unique~

However...you should keep your tense in check. As in, it changes sometimes.

Good luck in the assignment. Hope I was helpful.

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