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| K. Mason 2008-03-29 ch 1,  | abuseWow. You've done an absolutely fantastic job of establishing a mood in this poem. Great job, I felt every word. |
| fairytale failure 2008-03-01 ch 1, | abuseI really like the mood in this poem, and some of the lines were beautiful - 'Even if it is only contentment/can we invent our own form of happiness?' The stanza starting 'Slow down love, slow down' was my favourite. I don't think the attempt at rhythm/rhyme scheme works very well, though. The lines have differing lengths, which makes it difficult to pick up on the rhymes. |
| East-0f-Eden 2008-02-29 ch 1, | abuseI really like the Slow down love, slow down stanza. But, as far as meaning for your input I feel it meanders. |
| Dani P 2008-02-29 ch 1, | abusepretty good. simple. but good. i like it. |
| Midnight-Maddness93 2008-02-29 ch 1, | abuseThis was really good!! Keep up the good work! |