Hello there!

I love how you started it. I'd only read a few words and I felt like I was living it. And I particularly love the lines,

piles of memories buried deep, Forgotten.
a Riot
beneath the ashes of the next.

-and the ending. I think the stanzas could've been a little different, but the poem was really quite pretty. ;D

PS- Love the inspiration. It's nice when authors write it, too. It gives me a better idea to relate with. ;D ;D ;D

Wow, I loved the way everything fit in this poem. I can't find anything that I didn't like. A very good job. My fav line is "piles of memories buried deep, Forgotten.
a Riot
beneath the ashes of the next." Makes perfect sense.

really lovely imagery, very evocative. My only suggestion is that it might be better in stanzas; more organised and clear, and I think it would look better. other than that, great poem!

oh, this is beautiful! i love the imagery, lovely, lovely, lovely.

"A frenzied paint-on smile,
muted,
smeared across a surface of white."

great lines.

rowan.

i love the ending, GENIUS! great stuff

The simplicity was what drew me to this poem, it flowed well and all that needed to be said was said. Very effective.

Keep writing.