things'll get better. he loves you.

as a poem, i liked it. rhyming, of course, is always good in my book. good job.

((hope things get better))

Ok is he like totally ignoring the fact that your alive when he has a gf? If so thats no excuse, he's being a jerk. For you I hope it doesn't happen again. Best of luck!


XKristie MarieX

That was so sad but such a great poem at the same time. Keep up the good work! :)

*Bri

Aww, this is so sad. I hope things work out and get better. Have a great day.

~Twilight Starr~

Aww I almost cried when I found out the poem was about your brother. It was very beautiful. One day love won't get in the way f your brother...not if you feel the way it comes off in this poem about him. I think one of the lines that touched me most was: "Today I half dialed your number,"

I love that last line, it truely ties everything together. This whole poem was very touching and well written!
Hope things work out for you!

♥ Dreaming Chica ♥

Aww Sweets this is so ...I want to say cute, but that suggests happy, which it is not. It's ...amazing. It gets everything across. Great.

-stix-

I like the title because that's what it is... the history... I also love the ending the fay 1, 2 and 3... nice job

:( hang on baby... you wont lose your brother a second time. Not even the most cold-hearted person in the world would do that.

i love the way you kept it rhyming faithfully all the way through! whenever i try, I can only manage a few lines. (And i didn't mean for that to rhyme). anyway, great job!

ah, i see.
i like the repeating part.
good job, sir.
sir.
haha.