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| Clarelouise 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abusewell, definately gives an accurate insight into the girl's life, just realised we dont know her name! actually i think that works quite well, shows the anonymity(dunno if thats how u spell it) of the place. its rele sad how all the children are just bred like that to create whats almost an army. well done, a different type of thing to what u usually write but i rele felt like i knew the girl, rele gd! |
| Aomera 2008-03-01 ch 1, | abuseohh Poz, this is a bit fiesty (right word, yeh?) and its scary how well you write it...lol! :D the characters are built up beautifully as is the whole setting. tis terrifying that this actually happens. x |
| white.marble.rose 2008-03-01 ch 1, | abusedamn, it's only a oneshot! tease. *pouts* it's interesting how you don't use any names throughout the passage. i think it works really well :) i also find it incredible that there really were accepted organisations like this so recently. it's basically a child factory, isn't it? weird. hope you enjoyed drawing butterflies x |