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| hyperfuzzy 2008-08-11 ch 5,  | abuse*glares at evil spirit* holds up holy symbol* the power of the gods compel you. the power of the gods compel you. the power of the gods compel you. the power of the gods compel you. the power of the gods compel you. leave the childern alone! |
| bulletcereal 2008-04-11 ch 4, | abuseyes i am. this was th best horro story I have read. |
| bulletcereal 2008-04-11 ch 3, | abuseman this was a good chapter. i like the way this story is. |
| bulletcereal 2008-04-11 ch 1, | abuseinteresting chapter, lets see what happens |
| hyperfuzzy 2008-03-31 ch 4, | abuseis confused but wants to read more and when is 'noah' gonna pick up his reward? |
| Cigaro 2008-03-08 ch 4, | abuseThank you very much for reviewing! Also, thanks for the tip, although could you be a little more specific on the format part? |
| Myuro 2008-03-08 ch 1, | abuseI really liked the idea for the intro, but I was also a little confused by its format. I think if you described a little more, it would read a little better in that part. But, overall great chapter. |
| Cigaro 2008-03-05 ch 2, | abuseYou're totally right. My chapters are way to short. I think this is because this is actually an old story I wrote a while ago, and in some parts I already know what happens and I forget I'm not the reader. |
| Cigaro 2008-03-05 ch 1, | abuseI actually didn't know that. About both things. It seems that I leave quite a bit of errors in my writing. -.-' But thanks for the heads up! I'll fix it later. |
| Oceans of Mercury 2008-03-05 ch 2, | abuseI like the story idea, but it's moving way too fast. Even if you are aiming for this to only be a short story of a few thousand words it's still too simple. There are hardly any details and very little is happening. Who knows, maybe that's exactly what your aiming for. If not, then I advise pacing yourself, add details regarding surroundings, physical features of characters, characters thoughts and feelings etc. It's still a good story line. Keep writing. |
| Oceans of Mercury 2008-03-05 ch 1, | abuseHave you ever heard of the name Guglielmo Marconi? He was an Italian man born in 1874 and known for creating the first working wireless telegraph messages, basically one of the founders of wireless technology. Well, he firmly believed that one could communicate with the dead through these electronic means. He was not alone, Thomas Edison, Alexander Grahm Bell, and even Albert Einstein also believed through personal experience that it was possible. "I'm tired of yor **, Nick." You got a 'u' missing in 'your' "Yeah. This is...actuall, you haven't told me your names." Missing a 'y' in 'actually' I like the very young, yet very mature kids. |