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| UncontainedPoison 2008-03-24 ch 1, | abuseI could feel the emotions running rapidly around this majestic poetry. I love the style you use, while writing. Your doing marvelous! |
| Spirit Tigress 2008-03-23 ch 1, | abuseFormerly Spiritbreaker... I feel like that everyday, and it was well written. ~Spirit Tigress |
| Scarlett Wynter 2008-03-01 ch 1, | abuseGreat job. I like your style, it's succinct and flows really nicely. |
| 97thparis 2008-03-01 ch 1, | abuseThis is full of emotion. great job ;) |
| Burnt Bread 2008-03-01 ch 1, | abuseThe idea of a dove brings softness to the piece, contrasting the beginning and the end, and in a clever way provides closure to the piece. Well done. Your style of poetry isn't for everyone, but I'm getting use to it and loving the use of language - it's so succinct. The way your poetry flows facilitates truth without frills, everything seems raw (so raw in fact that it might still be hopping about and eating grass). Bread |
| felicia13 2008-03-01 ch 1, | abuseWow. Fragile, huh? Very tender, very soft. Somehow, poetry ends up looking like its subject. And you've captured that here. The last stanza is great. "Wrap me in her warmth so I don't break." We all need that sometimes, don't we? I wasn't sure where this was going at the beginning, but I'm very glad it ended up here. It's lovely, darling. May I ask what inspired this? Felicia. |