Wow...deep. Very good!

I feel your pain, Anne, I really do.

Good job on portraying her like this. It's so very beautiful and real. Keep it up!

Much love!

and the drama begins!

The point of view switch felt slightly awkward to me, probably because I've gotten used to reading from Anne's P.O.V. That said, I thought the conversation between Maria and Katharine was well-written, and I liked Katharine's attitude toward the situation, particularly in the last paragraph. Also liked the little details you included, like the place where Katharine reverts to her native Spanish – it made the dialogue seem more realistic. I still feel like this story is slow to start/hasn't really begun yet, but that's really my only complaint.

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I love the reference to the queens giving each other sympathetic looks – I could totally picture that in my mind. I felt like the part where Anne looked in the mirror and described her appearance was a little clichéd, however – lots of authors use "mirror-scenes" to allow their audience to learn of the characters' physical appearances, and it always feels a little contrived to me. I liked the introduction of Queen Katharine; the conversation between her and Anne seemed full of irony, considering what's going to happen later...


Minor details:

The two kings were magnificent looking as they were beside each other, garbed in jewel encrusted silk and cloth of gold. – This doesn't quite make sense to me... I think the "as" makes it awkward. Try:
The two kings looked magnificent standing beside each other...

A proud smile appeared on face, my love of the country where I was growing up prevailing over that of my birthplace. – You're missing the "my"

“Ah, forgive me for underestimating you, dear sister,” he said, his voice turned absentminded. – I think "turned" should be "turning"

Along the way, I passed by several couples of young nobility, drunk on wine, lust, or love; I was never sure which. – Nice!

“How lovely. Mistress Boleyn, you are English-born, are you not?” Queen Katharine addressed me. – Again, with the redundancy thing. "Queen Katharine said" would probably make more sense.

After smiling gently at me, she returned to the conversation she was having with Queen Claude before I had entered the room. – I think "was" should be "had been"

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I liked the interaction with George. I feel like I'm getting a really good sense of Anne's character from the dialogue: lighthearted, slightly boastful, a bit goody-two-shoes. The humor in this chapter made it really enjoyable to read, so kudos for that. Again, however, I felt like this chapter was a little on the short side; the plot doesn't really seem to have started yet, and having lots of short chapters makes the story feel a bit slower, I think. Or maybe I'm just a fan of really long, meaty chapters. ^_^

Minor details:

“Where is our tent located?” I questioned. – I don't know if the word 'questioned' should be used in this context; try 'asked'

“I should hope Father is not going to marry you off to a knight,” -- *grin*

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I really enjoyed this chapter. I like how you interweave the historical details (i.e. the story of Queen Claude) into the plotline. I got a really good sense of Queen Claude's character in a very short space of time, so excellent job introducing her as a character. The conversation between Anne and Mary feels a little odd to me, however – I was expecting Mary to be at least a tad angry that Anne had ratted on her to their Father, and the fact that she wasn't threw me a bit. But overall, another excellent chapter – looking forward to the next one!

Minor details:

“Anne?” I heard the voice of Queen Claude ask for me. – Again, this feels redundant. Try:
"Anne?" asked Queen Claude.

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Liked the exchange between Francois and Anne – it was amusing and fun to read. I love how you insert details and backstory into that exchange - introducing us to her sister, Mary, for example. You seem to have researched this story really well. My only criticism is that the chapter was a little short – we seem to have barely scratched the surface of the story. But maybe it's just one of those 'first-chapter-teaser' things. ^_^

Minor details:

Francois noticed my scowl, as he would have had to be blind not to. – This sounds a little awkward. I think the "as" is unnecessary. Try:
"Francois noticed my scowl; he would have had to be blind not to.

About to finally doze off, my eyes opened – This makes it sound as though her *eyes* were about to finally doze off... not Anne herself. Somehow, I don't think that's what you meant.

“Better a Moor than a whore.” – Nice play on words here

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I like how you began with the birth of Katharine of Aragon's son; it threw me for a minute (I didn't even know Katharine had had a son) but in a good/attention-grabbing kind of way. And you certainly have a way with last lines. The flow of this chapter felt slightly choppy in places (try not to start too many sentences in a row with he/she). Overall, though, the writing was really good. A solid start to the story... on to the next chapter!

Minor details:

“We are young yet,” he tried to soothe her. – This feels redundant; you state that he's soothing her and he's soothing her in the dialogue.

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I'm really enjoying this. I really like your take on Anne. Most people see her as an evil witch who stole Henry away from Katherine. They make her seem unreal. I like how you make her seem human, unlike many others.
Keep up the great work :)

It reads really well and I love Anne's character! The Tudor period is also really interesting. Good job- keep writing!

Thank you so, so much for the PM, directing me to this story! I would have never read it otherwise (I hate admitting that, but it's true), being that I'm not a big fan of the Tudor period.

But, and I say this with everything I have, I am enjoying this! The Tudor period, to me, has been nearly strung out to dry by so many other authors, but something about the way you write it gives it new life. And I must say that I'm exceedingly excited on the amount of Katharine that I've seen so far! She is my favorite of his wives. :)

i love that idea of changing pov...thank you for updating!!

Wonderfully written. It reads like a novel, and I would not be surprised to hear if it was published.
--Alex

... your change of title scared me. There's a Filipino book that has the exact same title as your story. But hey, I got no complains because I like it. I like how Anne is content with what she has, especially in this story. I'm beginning to see her in a new light.

It's so fitting with your new title, seeing as she's a virtuous woman.

Awesome update! Keep it up!