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| Needa S 2008-03-23 ch 1,  | abuseWish my poems rhymed that well. Beautifully done, awesome write! Thanks for the kind reviews. God Bless you. |
| Alexandria Smith 2008-03-11 ch 1, | abuseOk- I really enjoyed this poem, you really pull off the nature theme without making it so long that I want to fall asleep in boredom like some writers do. I'm very surprised that you wrote this in five minutes. Since I can't find anything that you could improve, I'm going to tell you a few things that you did that I really liked. Ok first of all, like I always say, you sneakily use rhyming words that just flow together, and I want to encourage you to keep doing that. Secondly, I love the way you convey the theme very clearly and stick with it.. so don't get sidetracked when your writing.. which you obviously don't have a problem with, which I'm going to appraise you on. Good job. Alexandria Smith |
| goonlaalgoon 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abuseWow. So beautiful. |
| simpleplan13 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abuseAnd the seagulls that touch/The surface of the waves... putting touch in the first line seemed a bit off to me I like this... the personification is beautiful and the ending is a really unique play on the usual phrase.. awesome piece |
| Scarlett Wynter 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abuseYou wrote this in 5 minutes? Wow. Great job! I like the rhyming and the mood it creates, it fits perfectly. |
| RandomUser674 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abuseThis was really good! Keep it up! |