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| Izzey 2008-03-08 ch 2, | abusevery descriptive. i like it |
| Tobyk947 2008-03-08 ch 1, | abuseI like it. It's angsty and depressing, and cold. Keep writing. I love your one shots. |
| clumsybella15 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abuse"The move watching rippled with sadness and a man dialed for the paramedics, giving them the location." The "move"? Uh? The man maybe? "She kissed him softly, the salt from her tears wandered onto his tongue and he kissed her face." He kissed her face?! Lips is better. |