Your RM prize review!

Small nitpicky thing, but the blanket thing didn't make sense. They seems like such longtime close friends so why wouldn't she just go in his house to get a blanket if he refused? It just seemed odd.

Also nitpicky, in the end starting those two paragraphs right after each other with Cecelia was a bit repetitive.

I liked the idea. I think the relationship between them was described well and I also like the ending. The way you phrased that was really great. Nice job.

That was sweet.

Didn't like that you didn't put the title in the piece 'cause you did that with the other ones.

I have a problem with the order here because it seems almost like a continuation of the last piece, which I'm guessing it's not suppossed to be.

I like the piece though, it's so simple yet it says so much. Especially with the title being so powerful.

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" she’d go right on living a lie."... I think "that lie" might fit better to refer back to other lines, just a thought.

I do like the piece, I think it's very relateable, but I think it's my least favorite so far. I don't like the way you describe the situation and the emotions because its not very original. It seems like something I've read before, you know? And since I've read your other work I know youre capable of great word choices and descriptions.

Though I like poetry and songs, I think that was a good decision.

I'm guessing these are in chronological order? I really would split up the two shorts ones. Disperse them between the longer ones. I think it would make for a better read.

I love this piece because of how the title adds a totally different element to it. I also think it's completely relateable.

I like the format. I think making it short was great 'cause it didn't need any more description. Also, the hyphen worked well.

I like how this is much shorter than the other pieces, it's a great change of pace.

I also love how you italicized romantic, it emphasized the word well.

The whole piece creates an interesting picture of this character in so few words. Nicely done!

"the brilliantly blue sky"... kinda a cliched description.

"Her reddening face belied her assertion of innocence."... really great word choices there

I like this. As writers we can all understand the burst on inspiration and wanting to hide it. Making him the love interest was a bit expected, but I think you described it well with lines like "to remain friends another day." I also loved that last line. It was a great image and very symbolic.

"verdant trees"... loved that word choice

I'm a little confused if this piece is connected to the previous one. Since the last one said intro I thought they would be connected, but it doesn't seem to be...

I like this piece because I can completely relate to how schoolwork gets like that. I also think that last line was great. It really showed how stressed she was.

Again thanks for the reviews!

"I pulled the earbud out of my ear as we pulled into our driveway "... I didn't like the repetition of pulled.

I like this. Your description of the scene is really nice. I also like how you capture the emotions of 4 different family members in such a short piece, that gave the piece more depth.

Sorry to see you're not in the Review Marathon this month (link in my profile).

the chapters are short but they are nice to read.

Even though most of these pieces were short, you manage to convey so much honest emotion and feeling through just a few sentences or words. I love each and every one of these snapshots. :)

Nice! You managed to convey all the feeling, longing, and nostalgic emotion in this simple sentence. I usually hear it as a 'white rose' so for you to use red for the symbolism was a great touch. Good job. ^^

What does this have to do with 'On the Radio'? Is it the song?

That line was cool.

Short and sweet. Well, more like bitter-sweet, because the writing was great, but she seems kind of sad. I liked this story. Or is it a poem?