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| Eilinora 2008-07-22 ch 5,  | abuseWhy are you writing stupid songs and poems? I guess wanna-be writers always write pathetic stuff like that, but seriously, at least post it in the proper section. If you want to write a hundred stupid poems, post the hundred stupid poems in the correct area. Tossing in a story every so often does not make it okay to post it here. |
| AuthorLittle 2008-07-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseThnx for the review! I read your profile and you said you're helping a friend edit...what is a 'YA fantasy'? Or 'YM', I forget...? Is this supposed to be a one-shot for an intro? I don't quite get it...anyway, yeah, if it is supposed to be an intro, it is fairly well done. I especially like how the father 'offers' the room and just leaves. Very understated, but very deep. And, yes...your review made sense. Barely, lol! |
| kloun doll 2008-07-19 ch 21, | abuseit´s interesting every chapter. |
| Jesusfreak43091 2008-07-17 ch 20, | abusei think this piece has so more potential than this! i like the idea of it, but i think you could have stated it better. i think word choice is crucial in this piece, and something that needs a little work. it doesn't flow very well beacause of it also, in the first stanza, don't should be doesn't. like i said, i really like the idea and i think it has some great potential, it just needs a little work |
| dreamer999 2008-07-16 ch 1, | abuseIt was a nice start but I got a bit confused, I thought that he moved to a new school or something...or was it a she?... Well, it was pretty good. It reminded me of the time that I moved to this house. Even now I still wish that I still lived in the same place. |
| Lorki 2008-07-16 ch 20, | abusewoah. You're killing this! Your head must be like an endless pit of ideas. I'm very impressed. The arrest line seemed a bit misplaced to me.. I don't know why. Other then that, I looked through all the chapters up to now and I'm in awe. -Lorki |
| DigitalScripter 2008-06-21 ch 8, | abuseVery nice. Thought I would just open the chapter index and pick the one that seemed most interesting. I liked it. |
| Lorki 2008-06-19 ch 8, | abuseI liked this one, i read a lot of them though, so I just decided to leave my review on this one. Good job on this, I don't think i could write so many things on so many different subjects XD -Lorki |
| Anon 2008-06-04 ch 17, anon. | abuseThey're called Hobby Horses. :) Otherwise, Nice! |
| Copper Chimes 2008-05-26 ch 16, | abuseI really like this. The mix of writing styles is fascinating. It has all the benefits of the very best pick and mix. Keep going, I hope you get all the way to 100! |
| Tranquil Thorns 2008-05-11 ch 9, | abuseI think this is a wonderful idea. (: I also like the fact that you have different writing methods for each theme - poems, little stories, songs, etc. This way the reader gets variety and even feels encouraged to read on, just to see what the next chapter holds. At least, that's what happened to me. Definitely keep working on this. |
| Miss Dagny Taggart 2008-05-05 ch 5, | abuseI love this one! It really captures me... My favorite part was: "Not sure which way I want to go And not much time to decide Eenie meenie miney mo Close my eyes and point and go" Thank you for this little piece :) |
| anon. 2008-04-21 ch 14, anon. | abusestory of my life |
| greenmcs 2008-04-12 ch 9, anon. | abusei really like this idea! keep it up! you have a great way of getting into what the mind is thinking. i really like the serenity one. actually, i really like all of them! |
| Arn 2008-04-08 ch 4, | abuseI edon't exactly share your thoughts on this poem, actually. I much like the darkness. You're hurting its feelings :( MWAHAHAHA |