aiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiaiiaiaaiiaiaiaiiai still tons a stupid istakes. (is his name even right)?

o srry Maple, and it's kinda short too...doh!@!

O by the way guys, taiwan rox1 and MessiahV are my classmates Albert and Victor. Maple steel I do not know at all, but loves his reviews anyways.(or hers)

An d galnced where the sound came from. sounds beter. But still good I guess

Doh! still some silly mistakes and typos! ah well, judging from review I guess it's okay lolz

Thumbs up for Mesto Nefurnest Tsu! Top fan...
Victor

I hate typing mistakes. I see a few of them like beginning sentence capitalization and a typo. I am saying something good.

two typos at the end but fine! This is extreemly long, the battle made fell of my seat! it wasw clearlley detailed, JSLAM must have done a good job editing, but I guess those two typo's are your own mistakes arn't they?

Nice short chap. It's sad that they die and all, but I am sure you go t better ideas do'nt you? I liked the quote "I, however, am elite." Isn't that from zatchbell or something?

EHH! Kind of too detailed at the end with all the blood and...It's better if I didn't talked about it1 Great chap! Go for the next!

Nice crufix at the end, making me want to read the next chap. Very fabolous work, you were the first story I could find, and I was prud to find you first!

Truly amazing! I feel great, not like some Lord of the Rings Rip ooff I often find here! Keep going!

good!