Reviews for Yuki's Haiku 1 - FictionPress.com

Rosette Kuran 2008-04-14 ch 1,	abuseI really enjoy reading your 15 chapter haiku ^^ They are really unique and have really good idealism to them. Keep it up!
Ygg 2008-04-01 ch 5,	abuseWhat I most miss in your Haiku is some kind of "deep schwung", or the "drama of the natural moment". In my view, a Haiku should be deeply layered with a lot of different (metaphorical) levels of understanding, where the actual words of the Haiku are only the top layer. A Haiku should make you ponder and wonder without ever directing you towards an explanation. The grace of Wonder is not to be explained. I'm not saying I can write Haiku like this, but it's just my view on what a genuine Haiku should be about.
Ygg 2008-04-01 ch 4,	abuseThe last line is tough, and fits very well with the title!
Ygg 2008-04-01 ch 3,	abuseQuestions indeed.. A bit too bland for my taste.
Ygg 2008-04-01 ch 2,	abuseAlthough the imagery is definitely great, I didn't like the successive adjectives in the last line ("silent, sad quiet beauty"). It kind of breaks the internal flow.. The idea is great though!
Ygg 2008-04-01 ch 1,	abusePretty dark and haunting (especially due to the last line)!