Reviews for LOVE is not nagging

simpleplan13
2008-03-09
ch 1,

abusefirst off I am confused how I missed this since I have you on alerts.. lol

Ok I like the piece... "horrible divide" is a nice phrase and "being ridiculous" is a good way to describe it... I like the ending too

The only thing is it's a bit repetitive.. maybe try
this
yearning,
aching and
horrible divide

breaks,
my heart,
my soul and
everything I wanted to hide

I'm being
honest,
true and
ridiculous
for loving you

Just a thought.. also the word wanted... I might look up a more powerful synonym

But it's still a really great piece that I know I can relate to.. and I like the title a lot

PS. If you want more input on this piece check out the review game... I'm participating in their marathon as I type.. lol links to both are in my profile

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