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Fyxthamnzwik
2008-03-26
ch 1,
abusesounds to me like she needs to walk first. "running" is not always as easy for one person as it was for the other. so many things to consider, like confusion, ostracism, and the fear of adopting a new identity.

walk with her first, and let her see that there is someone there with her. if she walks with you, at least you're not alone. Though you may want to run, if she's never comfortable with it, you should take comfort in knowing that even if you don't have her, she has you. being in love is knowing that the other person has you entirely, and that nothing can ever change that, while expecting nothing in return.
Alphabetical Dreams
2008-03-15
ch 1,
abusethat's a beautifully articulated poem! it has so much energy and power in it. i love the lines "we should run away from all this/from the big and lights,/and big egos." it's beautiful. i love the feelings in this poem. they are so wonfderfully imagined. it's lovely.

live, laugh, love.

C. a D.
Twilight Starr
2008-03-03
ch 1,
abuseIt painted a picture. Nice work.

~Twilight Starr~
Carousel Chorus
2008-03-03
ch 1,
abuseand again, your amazing. You have the most amazing way with words, k.
=P
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