|Reviews for Chronicles of a BlankPage Heart|
| generically beautiful 4/21/08 . chapter 6
Wow, I love the formatting of "every single freckle." Adorable and creative. Gold star!
It's nice to see this poem somewhere besides in a text message. P It looks a lot better written out than it did visualized in my head. No critiques or criticism from me this time, you've done well!
| generically beautiful 3/4/08 . chapter 5
Nothing analytical from me tonight, sorry. But this is SO SWEET! ) (Although that sweatshirt sounds mildly unsanitary.)
| generically beautiful 3/3/08 . chapter 4
When I tried to log in, FP asked, "Are you human?" I don't know, am I? Anyway, I'm feeling analytical tonight, so prepare yourself. This is going to be one long review.
Number one feels calm. I can see a girl tracing the lines on her hand with a vague smile and a daydreamy look on her face. If said girl was me, she'd be humming. ) The spaces in the word "fingertips" slow down the flow - a moment to be savored and remembered.
Number two seems more chaotic - a sentence spoken rapidly and in one breath. It's something that the speaker has to get out; it's driven by frustration.
Number three was my favorite of the four. That first sentence is brilliant, and the line breaks were pristine. The formatting is lovely. It doesn't clutter up the look of the poem whatsoever, and it emphasizes the words that carry the strongest meanings, whether they be physical ("catch") or emotional ("infatuation"). This is what good formatting should do. Emo poets should be kicked for writing formatted crap with no significance.
The formatting carries over into number four, once again drawing the reader's attention to the words that give the poem their meaning. Visually, this poem makes me smile. The thought of a girl sneaking around at sunrise and leaving a poem on someone's doorstep is adorable and heartbreaking at the same time. I love the third person, as well.
Well, there you have it. I think that's the longest review I've ever left for anyone. Ever. Will there be more in this series?