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d666lisa
2008-04-20
ch 1,
abuseExcellent, I love the lines "I think you’re trying to talk to me…
but I can never tell if you’re just lip-syncing lyrics" but I agree with a previous reviewer that they didn't need to be in italics.
Very well written :)
Shadows in the Fire
2008-03-04
ch 1,
abuseI love the lines "...because no one needs to know that you're attempting therapy".

Brilliant, as always.

-Shadow
bathwater
2008-03-04
ch 1,
abuseFantastic last lines! I like the alliteration. Only I think they are so strong that they stand on their own, and don't even need the extra emphasis with the italics.
Great job on this one!
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