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| d666lisa 2008-04-20 ch 1, | abuseExcellent, I love the lines "I think you’re trying to talk to me… but I can never tell if you’re just lip-syncing lyrics" but I agree with a previous reviewer that they didn't need to be in italics. Very well written :) |
| Shadows in the Fire 2008-03-04 ch 1, | abuseI love the lines "...because no one needs to know that you're attempting therapy". Brilliant, as always. -Shadow |
| bathwater 2008-03-04 ch 1, | abuseFantastic last lines! I like the alliteration. Only I think they are so strong that they stand on their own, and don't even need the extra emphasis with the italics. Great job on this one! |