Reviews for The Lion and the Lamb

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Isabella22 2008-05-09 ch 14,	abuseI love your description. it's so beautiful. And what a shocker about aislin and kriagen! Update pronto!
narcoleptic dreaming 2008-05-06 ch 14,	abuseOkay, I've finally found some time to read/write/review/whatever. It won't last. D: Anyway... here we go. First off, the whole Council meeting confused me. Kriagen is the king? King of what? Wha? Maybe I'm forgetting something from the last few chapters because of my hiatus, but that just sent me off in a spiral of confusion. Who does the Council consist of? Other high-ranked vampires? Was Pan invited because of his power? Why was there need to include him? Okay, now, onto the memory/dream. So in attempts to feel better about himself, Pan tries to find solace in Aislin's mind, instead getting way more than he bargained for. I get that. The whole bit with Kriagen was a bit... surprising, to say the least. I know you're withholding information for obvious reasons, like suspense and the fact that Pan can't know everything by just witnessing, but I do hope you explain how that all came about. Also, if Morgan is Aislin's sister, then why didn't she break her out of the asylum when they came for Jack? Did she know she was there? Did she not want to save her, perhaps because she figured out about the forcible "affair" between her and Kriagen? I'm asking way too many questions, sorry. Why does Pan want to have Aislin remember such terrible memories? Why would that be good for her? Forgetting is the mind's way of keeping itself healthy, of protecting itself. Why would Pan try to ruin the little bit of peace she's created for herself? I'm also interested as to how/why Kriagen and Morgan became vampires. I've come to believe that Kriagen would had to have been human when he raped Aislin, because... well, the whole vampiric coldness mixed with lack of blood has something to do with it. Ahem. Anyway... I hope all of these get answered in the future. Looking forward to your next update! ~Narco
narcoleptic dreaming 2008-03-31 ch 13,	abuseAh, I see you took my advice about his mother! I must say I was pleased with that, although the bit did seem slightly out of place. But it tied up some loose ends, and I'm glad you put it in there. I really want to know why Aislin was in the asylum... Jack was understandable, but Aislin has yet to show any issues that would make her prone to imprisonment. In fact, from everyone's descriptions, she appears rather harmless. There were maybe 2 tense problems throughout, but nothing devastating. I remember one of them specifically, when Jack was talking about his hand glowing. But other than that, the chapter was consistent. I don't know if it's just me, but overly-innocent girls tend to annoy me. That doesn't at all mean that Aislin is a bad character; I would just like to see more of her personality. I hope that future situations will reveal more of her inner self, maybe some flaws and such. See her make a few mistakes. Something like that. Well, that's all I really have to say about this one. Things should start to get even more interesting now that Pan's tried to make amends with the wolves. I look forward to your next update. ~Narco
Isabella22 2008-03-26 ch 13,	abuseI liked him incredibly in this chapter. He seemed like he DID have a soul. Great writing! I never know what the next chapter contains!
Isabella22 2008-03-25 ch 12,	abuseI liked that chap. It shouldv'e been a bit more spaced out. It was hard to keep track of which line i was reading. update soon!
Isabella22 2008-03-25 ch 11,	abuseSomething about Jack bugs me. I'm not sure what. He seems...too much like the other vampires. Blood thirsty...
narcoleptic dreaming 2008-03-24 ch 12,	abuseThis one was a bit longer than all of your others! I was a bit surprised. It was very in-depth as well; much deeper in respect to Pan than the previous chapters. The detail was full and descriptive. Aha! I found a tense problem! "The cobra fought and [it was] still fighting[,] but I [wouldn't] let it go." But that's the only one. Congrats! The biggest question for me in this chapter was: Why did they have a gathering at Jack's old house? It either seemed very random and strange or strategical; I don't know if the wolves saw it as some sort of safehouse, but I was a bit confused. Secondly, the way he described his mother seemed a bit brief even though he seemed to have loved her very much. I would have expected more concentration on her, even if it was just a few more sentences. But that's just me. Anyway, I can't wait to see how Pan handles further love struggles with Aislin. I look forward to your next chapter. ~Narco
narcoleptic dreaming 2008-03-24 ch 11,	abuseYou write way too fast for me. ^^; Anyway... this chapter seemed a bit rushed to me. I know your chapters aren't terribly long to begin with, but the length wasn't the problem. Things just kept coming and coming and I hardly had a chance to process. For instance, when Pan arrived in Aislin's room. I don't know if I read this wrong, but all of a sudden Cain was there? Was he standing there the entire time? How did Pan not sense his presence or see him? My eyes have selective reading, so just let me know if I missed something. D: The next thing that puzzled me was Pan's hostility towards Cain. I understand that he is now a vampire, but is that the only reason he acts so unkind to him? Unless Pan is a very impressionable person, it would seem to me that he might want to get on the wolves' good side so he can see Aislin. I doubt that would have made the situation any better, but it just seemed like a smarter thing to do. Besides those things, though, it was an interesting chapter. The whole mirror travel thing was neat. Does that only apply to the seer's mirror, or can he do it to any other one? If so, I'd like to know how the Chaos allows him to do so. I'll get to reading the next chapter now. :) ~Narco
Capritarius 2008-03-23 ch 3,	abuseI love the cage of thorns metaphor. Sorta reminds me of crucifixion. The story's easy to sort of get lost in, but I suppose that adds to the theme of craziness
Capritarius 2008-03-23 ch 1,	abuseCertainly draws you in straight from the start. Somehow, the ending is too abrupt, too foggy, but other than that, it's good
narcoleptic dreaming 2008-03-21 ch 10,	abuseWATCH YOUR TENSES. I can't stress that enough. There were several places where you slipped up, all the while I was screaming a dramatic "No!" inside of my head. Yeah. Anyway... interesting chapter. So the Chaos allows Pan to enter people's dreams? There doesn't seem to be a limit to what it can and cannot do--you might want to specify that sometime. At first he can change matter or destroy it, but now the Chaos has some sort of psychic quality to it. I'm getting a bit confused. So was Jack and Aislin's romance very forward, or was it more of a hidden thing? I had a few questions arise inside of my head while I was reading, like: Why was Jack/Pan so forward with her in the dance? He didn't seem shy at all. I assumed at first that his appearance erased all of his insecurities, but I didn't want to assume incorrectly. and If the werewolf child could recognize Pan by his movements, why shouldn't his love interest? It would seem to me that she would know him better than anyone else. But that again brought me to the question of how developed their relationship was in the first place. Uhm, so yeah... just a few of my ramblings. And again, watch those tenses! I look forward to your next update. ~Narco
Isabella22 2008-03-15 ch 10,	abuse(I must have missed something in the previous chapter. How much time has passed?) You update soon, I can't wait! (P.S. Loved the silver apple)
Isabella22 2008-03-15 ch 9,	abuseI loved the sunrise seen. You described it beautifully.
Isabella22 2008-03-15 ch 8,	abuseI really really really really REALLY don't like Morgan. I hope something bad happens to her...(lol)
narcoleptic dreaming 2008-03-13 ch 9,	abuseThe way your described those swords made them sound so pretty. :3 I've never been good with weapons, so I'm a bit jealous. I was a bit puzzled by the woman that appeared after Pan touched the sword, though. Is it haunted maybe? I guess I'll have to see. Anyway, you have a few mistakes in tense again in this chapter. "Somehow, [those] candlelit halls [became] familiar. I [knew] [I was there] for several days, maybe more[;] but the strange thing [was], I [didn't] exactly want to leave." The brackets are just suggestions of what could go in the places of the mistakes. There are a few others, but I trust your eye in being able to find them on your own. Besides that, though, a curious chapter. I await your next update~ Narco

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