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| Logic Escapes Me 2008-11-19 ch 1,  | Love your story, Nova seems like a really great girl, and Fin a nice guy. When do you plan on putting up the next chapter? |
| Qzz 2008-06-08 ch 1,  | hey... this is really good. very intriuging, keep writing! i'n interested to find out what happens next! |
| All The Rest 2008-05-28 ch 1, | Wahoo! I am hooked, and this is only the first chapter. Man, I hope you continue! ^-^ I like the idea that her voice is dangerous (or might be), and that's why she doesn't use it. Keep up the good work! |
| cue.dramatic.gasp. 2008-04-20 ch 1, | HOLY CRAP!?!?!?! That is the best story EVER. I mean, not ever, but like seriously, that is the **. I love it. I FREAKIN' LOVE IT. You better update...please? I think it's a really good plot and I like the end, where it shows what happens. ah-may-zen. -cue.dramatic.gasp- |
| MythCreatorWriter 2008-03-05 ch 1, | Wow, so her voice has power? Wow, that's unique. I like your characters for this, though the name Phinius makes me think of the new Disney show. But his nickname is cute, and Johanna is a beautiful name. I certainly hope you continue with this. Just for further notice, would you like me to point of misspellings, spacing issues, and stuff like that? Cause I can do that for ya. I would love, absolutely love to know why, in detail, she has to be quiet. |
| pinkfairydust 2008-03-04 ch 1, | oh wow. an amazing introduction to this story.. i can tell it's going to be good =] keep writing!! |
| Alenor 2008-03-04 ch 1, | hmm, it's interesting. can't wait for more ~ Alenor. |
| beccabrighteyes 2008-03-04 ch 1, | This is really cool. I like retellings but I've never seen one of the Little Mermaid before. Are you following the Disney plot or the original Anderson plot? |
| artificial destiny 2008-03-04 ch 1, | oh wow! first off i want you to know that i LOVE twisted fairy tales. absolutely love them and i really like your idea/concept its really unique! though i felt you could have developed it more with more foreshadowing and such, you did an awsum job in some phrases like "Nova, sitting delicately beneath the tree." im SURE you can do SO Much better with what you already have. its really great! pls keep writing! -artificial destiny r/r back! im writing a twisted robin hood right now, :( my problem is that i write TOO descriptively. i'd love to have you help me with shortening/freshening it up :D |
| TheTrueBlue41728 2008-03-04 ch 1, | This is amazing. Please finish all your stories! :( |
| TrixInTreats 2008-03-04 ch 1, | oh my god. =] i love it. enrapturing woman!- from the first few paragraphs in and i like how i like nova without being ** that shes like- drop dead goreous, and i love "the boy" =] cuz hes not a dick! UPDATE update update update |