This is pretty good. A quick spellcheck would make it even better. :) Write on!

~Anna~ ^_^

I agree that the imagery is really good...and I especially like the line "each night praying to see the sun rise"...its dramatic

Oh, lovely. I really like this. The imagery from it is really good, especially the three lines at the beginning and end.
A couple of things--please don't kill me for this, but I'm a grammar nut--
"dieing" should be "dying"
"there" should be "their"
"whose" should be "who's"
Then again, grammar doesn't make a poem--it never does.
This is really good work; keeping writing!