For short poems, they are all very well written...I like the style, as I am having a hard time as well focusing on what I've been writing, and focusing my energy and emotions into it...As you know, I'm now writing more of a book, and this has helped me a little on how to write it...

Thank you Brother.

_Vincent, SN

i really liked the last sentence in the last poem, "showing my words upon the wind".

i must say the other ones were really morbid, even for you, mob. they were totally awesome literarily (i don't know if that's even a word), but what they were about was really...just morbid.

not my favorites, but expression is what matters on FP, so good job.

always, irony

Five syllables, One word. Un-be-liev-a-ble. Each and every one spoke to me, mob. "Bloodlust" was reminiscent of "The Beast", and very good. "For Me" was just...your first lines there really caught my attention, and it was just mind blowing. I loved that one especially. "Legacy" was very meaningful to me. And by golly, if "Recipe for Disaster" didn't strike my heart and describe EVERYTHING I've thought about these past five months...then nothing would.
Thanks for writing, Mob. Fictionpress would be a less meaningful place without you and what you post.

Always, Irony

Very impressive new installments. My favorites were "The First Day of My Life" and "Suicide".
I can't really think of anything constructive or encouraging to say, except that I am continually amazed by these. Keep it up, mob.

Always, Irony

INSANELY LONG REVIEW. Enjoy, nonetheless. =D

"Untitled" was definitely a resounding gong for me. Just last night I was pushing myself for inspiration and started writing about blood...and something crazy like that. It was pretty good, I THINK. But I don't know what I did with it. ANYWAYS-"Untitled" definitely stuck in my mind, and all of the new ones were as equally as amazing as the first ones. You're doing a wonderful job, mob.
I absolutely love "Masterpiece". I love the way that you italicize some of the words-and when I read it aloud it has more of an effect. Very original, and a very rewarding creative leap, i think you'll find. "Time" stuck my feet to the floor, most definitely. "Abandoned" spoke to me profoundly. "Piece by Piece" screamed my own thoughts back at me from the page, and "A Life for a Possession" truly targets the "American Dream".
All around-you did an absolutely superb job. I am loving every further step you take with this. Maybe this season of "short writing" will be better than you think. Er, that is, if you thought it wouldn't be good in the first place...I get ahead of myself.

Always, Irony

Firstly: I was surprised to get sixteen stinking emails in my inbox at once. (I just changed laptops since my old one crashed, and figured out that no one emails me anymore!)
Secondly: *jaw hits the floor* When you said they were going to be short, I though short for you meant 100 words or something. So I was surprised at the length, being shorter, but that didn't take any of the power away from it. Every poem, every page left me breathless in the millions of different meanings each poem could express and hold. There's so much in such few words that I was utterly astounded. The brevity, might I say too, was refreshing. Like my film teacher says: "Any idiot can make something complex, but it takes a true genius to make something simple."
All I can further say is you did and amazing job so far...and I hope that you keep a steady flow-but, as a writer, I do understand the long bouts of lack of inspiration. >< Dreadful to go through. ANYWAYS...absolutely amazing.

Always, Irony