you should write more poems

The idea of conformity is very nice here... and I like how the beginning and the end are similar... I also like the rhyming, but the scheme confused me a lot... it was aa, b, c, d, ee, f...that just threw me off a bit, but it's a nice piece.. especially for someone who isnt really a poet

PS If your bored check out the Review Game and its Review Marathon (links in my profile)

Hi omg amazing. and i remember cloud nine...scrawled on the back of like your copy or something in like first year! awh memories. thanks for logging me in btw. everything up so far is amazers but of course nothing less is expected!lol! awh you were called odd...i'm glad your happy bout it lol! might uplaod some stufs myself...XOX

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. Left me almost completely speachless; just enough words to leave a review. :-)

Okay, I know you said you're not a poet and all that... but I think you've got potential, however cliche your subjects are. I liked how you used the first two lines again at the end.

I'll give you some pointers, though.

Never use center aligned format. It's just not good on the eyes and it does nothing to flatter your poem. I was guilty of this myself, multiple times... and then I joined an actual write and critique community and they tore me apart so I could stitch myself back together.

Always use punctuation unless your intention is to not have a pause. Just because a line ends doesn't mean there's a pause, so your poem would read aloud like this:

"another vacant day all the colors fade to gray all minds conform morphing to the norm identical, so uniform"

Yeah, there's not much room for you to take a breather in the case of reading it aloud (not saying that I'm assuming you are going to, but that's how poetry is. A lot of readers imagine it as if it's being spoken, or actually read it aloud. Having little to no pauses confuses the readers unless you make it seem intentional.)

Get rid of the double spacing, because it's troublesome to read it that way. If you don't know how[document editor is tricky with this], you can PM me and I'll explain it :]

Separate your poem into stanzas.

Don't capitalize each line unless it's the start of a new sentence or if you're starting the line with a pronoun.

These "rules"(except the center format and the double spaced lines) can be ignored once you're more comfortable in your justification for doing such things. Hope you found this at all helpful.