This is a brilliant piece, very different from your other work. I am worried about what drove you to write this for your assignment...

THIS. IS COOL.

An awesome essay/general piece of writing. A very interesting look at, well, yourself. Write on. Wow. I loved this. It didn't feel like a college essay at all, which is the best part.

This is really good. I think you did a great job with putting a message into your work wether you meant to or not. And, band kids rule!