the way the words fit together makes it seem like it was an easy write it does not sound forced like some of many rhyming poems
i feel like you did not have to search for the words that they just came to you
good job

it's like a short tale, the imagery is good.

Took me a moment to decode this one, or at least as much as I could. I wasn't disappointed with the results. Both poetically and symbolically, quite a piece of art.

I've got to be honest and say that some of this goes right over my head. but it sounds rich and wonderful, and I think the basic concept gets through. The rhyming is right on.