I absolutely love the imagery of this piece: beautiful. Your writing seems to grab the reader and drag him/her in. Especially liked your comparison of the dress to a "flag of surrender".

There were a few places where your breaks didn't quite make sense to me; for instance:

“You were lovely here,” She speaks, - I think it should be "she"

“Your frailty summoned by compassion… Your touch, of homesickness wrought, felt softer than any summons of strength,” the rocks - I think this should be two separate sentences.

Overall, however, wonderfully done. :)

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Beautifully written, there is a definant wistful, tragic feel to your writing.

Yours are the only stories that I come away from wishing that I had something worth writing about.