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| siphoned afterglow 2008-04-15 ch 1,  | abusehaha, i love this. love the ending too, a bit sad but it keeps a smile lingering on my face. |
| gulistanlik 2008-04-01 ch 1, | abuseOuch. Damn, that's gotta hurt. And suck. I'm guessing the narrator is a guy? I like your style of writing. I found this fic on the favourites list of another author. And I'm glad I did! Good reading material, yay! I think I'll check out your other stuff too. =D Keep up the good work! gulistanlik |
| smudged lines 2008-03-29 ch 1, | abusei loved it. i like how you used short sentences to build up the end. it worked very well. and the end...when i read it, i burst out laughing. that's classic! and an awfully clever way to tie it altogether. yes, somehow, an overly sweet and sugary ending wouldn't have done quite as much justice as this one has. i don't know if it was intentional but he way you pick what details to describe...like you choose to add an extra detail to the sound system but you don'tdescribe the pizza parlour. it's quirky and i really liked that about this story too. it's a great one-shot. cheers. |
| dress-without-sleeves 2008-03-29 ch 1, | abuseOh, my goodness. That was both terrifically funny and terribly sad. I kind of don't even know whether I should laugh or cry. But I think I'll go with laughter, just because. I'm kind of obsessed with this, don't be weirded out by that. It's just so ... believable. And simple. I just love it! |
| RoseLife 2008-03-22 ch 1, | abuseloved it hella realistic and styles awsome nice ^^ |
| KnittingKneedle 2008-03-08 ch 1, | abuseThis review is brought to you by the review marathon (link on my profile) The end of this made me laugh, because in real life that's how romantic gestures always turn out. Like crap. So this was funny and realistic. I'm not sure I liked the jump to the pizza parlour like that, perhaps a line break would have made the transition less awkward. 'And I consider initiative. And you consider pepperoni or plain.' The set up to the pay off was fabulous, I liked the short sentances adding to the tension and then just when you think it's all gone well 'bam!'. That's life though isn't it Good job! |
| creepy kiss on tuesday 2008-03-07 ch 1, | abuseCute :] |