...very good. tastefull...you achive a great flow
"Where is the way out? Down the hall once more Portraits of my former hearts Hang in ivory frames"

keep it writing.

This world is ((In State Of Agony))

I rather liked it too. I can definately say i can relate to it =) Beautiful imagery. Pale Jewel was a great title aswell =)
Maybe you could read a poem of mine sometime? good work =)