Wow, this is really good! i love pray that the strings of your world won't fail! it's a really amazing line. this poem is sweet and simple but well written and honest...I heart it!

I agree with Random-Idiocity: "Pray that the strings that hold your world won’t fail" is a strongline that really stood out to me, though I'm not so sure about how you ended it. But still; I liked it! :)

I know how it can be writing when your half awake. This wasn't that bad. ''Pray that the strings that hold your world won't fail'' was a good line. Keep it Up!

i'm going to go ahead and say this wasn't a pay-off. your rhymes are forced, and your rhythm is broken.