i liked the style

Wow...very nice freeverse. You have a unique style. :)

I can't say that I'm personally a fan of the e.e. cummings-ness of this poem, but that's a stylistic choice. You certainly evoke a scene and, if not emotions, traits, in this poem. The last two lines did not quite connect, but I liked them more than the others because they were astronomical instead of physical. This review is based a lot on personal instead of writerly opinion, so don't mind that my feelings for this piece are lukewarm--I can find no problems with the rhythm.

i like it, it makes me think.
but im curious to know your interpretation of it.

-artificial destiny