| Reviews for Did I Ask for a Flu Shot? |
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fatbird33 3/8/08 . chapter 1ohh ohw i hate shots,love the title. i don't think the author note was really nesisscary. sorry i have to think of construcive cricism for a reviewe marathon contest, so i'm kind of stretching my mind because there wasn't really anything wrong with this poem, but sh it's a secret! |
Bobby Thrill 3/7/08 . chapter 1Funny, but very sing-song and a bit boxy with the rhyme. I did, however, appreciate that it wasn't an abab scheme. I ask incessant questions whenever I visit the doctor, just so that he doesn't manage to slip something over on me. |
Tranquil Thorns 3/7/08 . chapter 1Ahh! I hate flu shots. '( No wonder you wrote a poem of complaint. Especially that last line of it. ;P On the whole, I like how quick and simple you made it. It manages to convey the idea efficiently. However, I thought the rhymes didn't work very well. 'Arm' and 'harm' just sounded too forced, and putting 'weak' and 'week' together slowed down the flow, too. Nice ending, like I said! |