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| Kefrith 2008-07-14 ch 1, | abuseThis is fantastic! Fyi, I noticed one grammatical error which I don't think was intentional: On the 11th line from the end, the first "to" ought to be "too". Great work, though! |
| soccerfreak18 2008-03-12 ch 1, | abuseI think the title went well with the story. I liked it a lot. lke people talking to another thing i was chill. made me smile. thanks for the review. =] |
| Twilight Starr 2008-03-10 ch 1, | abuseInteresting. I liked the conversational bit about it. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| simpleplan13 2008-03-08 ch 1, | abuseI like the phrase about the snail.. it's interesting an great alliteration... the part about you being a puddle is also really awesome.. and the play on the word but was funny too I'm not sure if the piece was supposed to be confusing because of the theme or not.. but it was a bit confusing about what was talking and what wasnt and who was saying what, but other than that nice job PS If your bored check out the Review Game and its Review Marathon (links in my profile) |
| Getuie 2008-03-07 ch 1, | abuseThe title of this piece drew me to read it. Admittedly, I didn't grasp everything (or perhaps most) of it. With that said, it did kind of remind me of my own nondescriptness. The fear of revealing more yet the longing to reveal. The lines 'Yes, like a glass of water being spilled: / I gush out to fast to be saved (let alone noticed)' struck me as most revealing of the speaker... and something I think is the outcry of many. |