I'm sure you didn't do these things intentionaly. Don't blame yourself to much. Nicely Written.

XKristie MarieX

really sad and piece.. especially the ending.. I like how the whole piece is questions... but I think it might look better if each question was its own stanza.. also I might change one of the helps because you use it in two questions...

Still it's a really well done piece... and Im sorry for your loss

PS If your bored check out the Review Game and its Review Marathon (links in my profile)