I LOVE this poem. Great job. I would love to show some people in my math class this...

BFQ

Hold all around me and the... past tense seems wrong

You don't need to yak your mouthes off to the person next to you... mouths.. also I think that line is a bit long

I love the parts in parenthesis and the idea of whole piece... I have thought things like this a lot.. I also like the three lines beginning with every.. one thing in the beginning I might not use conversations twice.. I might use discussions or something

Really great piece

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I can relate to this! I like the words in bracets, how they change the meaning of the sentence!

Nicely done!

♥ Dreaming Chica ♥