But alas, no one remembers or knows his name... remember and knows seem odd together

I like the description of his eyes that was really nice... and I like the way you describe him in the 8th stanza.. you use some really nice words

I also really like the rhyming and the phrasing.. it makes it sound kinda fairytaleesque, which it is a bit and I also like the importance you attach to his name

One thing... Im not sure if it's just my computer or what but there are these random like boxes of dots throughout the poem.. it's either my computer or a fp format weird thing... maybe check it out though

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I liked the beginning, but at the end I thought your flow was a little off. Most of the rhymes here seem too forced, to the point where some stanzas are hindered instead of being allowed to run smoothly.

Maybe you can work out some of the rhymes/replace some words here and there? I think that would help a lot.

I noticed a few mistakes here and there, but nothing major. Also, I think your apostrophes spazzed out a bit. =P All I see are weird symbols.

All in all, though, I liked the story you told.