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simpleplan13 2008-03-08 . chapter 1
Eyes tight shut.. tightly

I like this... the descriptions are really great... I like the beginning especially... it's a great description of the cold... two things though.. in one part you call the sled a toboggan, which I think is something different... also I think it needs a bit more punctuation in there...

Anyhow it's still a really great piece... almost as if you are sledding too

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