Hilarious; really good satire

lol wow u were right I rly don't think she knows what a satire is supposed to look like. Neways this was awsome! "Just bomb 'em!"..gotta love ur straight-forwardness. ;P

MK

no one could follow that up in english class. cos it rocks. xD

I liked the satire in the paper, but I think you used the satire as the bulk of your paper instead of actually making a point. The attempt to be amusing actually overpowered any point you intended to make. The first paragraph was good, but after that it got kind of sloppy.

It's supposed to be satire, but even so, you need to check you're facts. A lot of the stuff you said is not completely true. Also, the use of first person interrupts the flow of the paper. You're not supposed to use first person.

Keep Writing!

LostInLalaLand (with the Review Marathon)