It was wonderful and heartbreaking

Girl, this story is amazing so far, you've got me hooked. i can't wait for more.

Very good, she's staying very true to character so far. There were just a few little mistakes, i.e. "quaint green eye" (a little reminiscent of a Cyclops) but nothing major. Allen seems like a very interesting character so far and I can't wait to find out more about him. What's this about visiting hours I wonder?
Thoroughly enjoyable.

Lady Saphira

i feel like i was there. still.
i feel like im watching it all happen.
its a another amazing chapter.
keep up the work!
^^

Another Great Chapter.
:D still feels like im liveing in the story.

This Is Another Amazing Chapter.
Your A Truely Amazing Writer.

This chapter is really good.
it felt like i was actully there. and seeing it all happen.
its really amazing.

I really like your story so far. Lillians emotions are so real. Please continiue writing this story

Wow this is amazing, I can't wait for more. My only suggestion is that you might want to spread out your character descriptions ever so slightly, it would add more interest that way, I think, and take away the slight feeling that one is reading a character profile. Other than that excellent work. This is definitely my kind of story.

Lady Saphira

I'd bet Allen's parents are dead.