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Ranger of Arnor 2008-07-02 ch 3,	abuseNice chapter. i guess not all of the dolls turn out right, that one was pretty crazy...
MelodramaticFool 2008-06-29 ch 11,	abusegood luck! i will miss you. ;o;
Allergic to Paradox 2008-06-29 ch 11,	abuseack! you tricked me, i thought this would be another chapter! pouts ah, well, it's always good to get your stories in order. heavy sigh us loyal fans will just have to wait (with impatiently tapping toes) for this fall! love and hugs, your sis
A.S Lee 2008-06-29 ch 11,	abuseokay, even though I'v only read to ch. 2 or 3 so far, I will wait for the great oak then pick this up again. thanks for the memo.
Looking for Bliss 2008-06-28 ch 2,	abuseThis is really original, which is always nice! =D The interaction between the characters is really realistic and flows nicely. I loved the opening to, it set the scean perfectly and catches the attention immediately! I will definately read more, when i have time... =D
Singular Angel 2008-06-16 ch 10,	abuseAh! Doll-raper. Good story dear, I like the plot. Keep writing, I'll keep reading. Realize, I've read every single chapter you've ever posted on FP. Haha, awesome. Nice, enjoyable read. Look forward to more! :]
Singular Angel 2008-06-16 ch 9,	abuseWoah, freaky chapter but probably your best. The love thing came on quickly though. You're definately coming to be a better writer with each chapter though. Good job and keep stretching your writing skills.
Singular Angel 2008-06-16 ch 8,	abuseOh, I like the mystery at the end of this. Nice job. The birthday thing is cute too. I'm almost done!
Singular Angel 2008-06-16 ch 7,	abuse"On my way, I saw Elizabeth and Dr. Ledve making out in a corner. I stopped, stunned. I had only ever seen it in movies. It was weird to see it in real life. And what the hell was Andrea DOING, kissing a doctor she JUST MET?" You did the switchy thing again. I liked Ken's pov. It was well done and kinda funny. I really like the chart thing that Elizabeth found. That's pretty cool. "I watched her for a moment, then started telling her of my bordem, and typing in some password or something. She pursed her lips and clicked on a link labeled 'Shots'." You switched povs here to Saro. This was my favorite chapter though. It adds mystery and suspense and whatnot. Good job.
Singular Angel 2008-06-16 ch 6,	abuse""Let's see... Saroline, you'll be partnering Alan--" Joy. "--Kenneth, you'll be partnering Morgan, and Andrea, you'll be partnering Dr. Ledve, who has genorously agreed to help!"" You say that Andrea partners with Dr. Ledve, I think you mean Elizabeth. Also, you say that the first aid teacher's name is Helena at the beginning of Elizabeth's pov and then you say its Gladyz Driggle. Just something to chance. I like this chapter. Its longer (which is always a plus for me) and I like Elizabeth so it was nice to get her pov.
Singular Angel 2008-06-16 ch 5,	abuseIt seems a tad sudden but I suppose its because they're being treated like experiements, right? This is a good chapter. I like the "poison honey". Also, I forgot to mention this. The point of views are really well done. I think I would get confused with them after a while.
Singular Angel 2008-06-16 ch 4,	abuseI like the explaination for the enhanced romantic feelings. That allows things to make more sense. This chapter is pretty good, the questioning and everything. Dialogue is decent and everything so good job. PS: I no longer put smilies in reviews because FP has a bad habbit of cutting my reviews off when I do so.
Singular Angel 2008-06-16 ch 3,	abuseThe "Like Real" phrase is powerful. I like that. Also, the action sequence is well-compiled. A couple of cunstructive points though: check spelling/grammar with a quick read-over. Also, you introduced a lot of character very fast. Make sure your reader can keep up. I'll keep reading and give a detailed thing at the end.
Singular Angel 2008-06-16 ch 2,	abuseThis seems a bit like the move "Life-Size" And oh dear, it's Ken. o.0 Like, living Barbie dolls right? Haha, nice plot so far though. It's original. Try mixing up the descriptions of the characters a bit. You describe their hair, eyes, body, and clothes, typically in that order. Try adding details about structure, height, etc. They all seem to lack personalities a bit but if that's intended, bravo because personality develops in humans. Good start.
Singular Angel 2008-06-16 ch 1,	abuseSophia darling, I told you I would get to it. Did I not? I always live up to my promises. I do apologize it took so long but I'm prepared to read this entire thing in one sitting because it's only 10,0 words. I can do it! Ready? Here we go! First chapter, interesting start, leaves the reading wanting to know more. I like the mystery in it. Some of the descriptions are nice like the lily white of her hands. Beautiful imagery.

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