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| Guatemalan Rocker chikk 2008-06-28 ch 11,  | abuseahh ; nice story : ) very intriguing...if thats how you spell it. WELL,,... who is carlie going to end up with?! haha and whats going to happend ot cassie and chandler? she HAD to ruin it,didnt she? haha well..if you still need a name for the story that is a FEMALE then you can always use MY name :D -melissa . hehee... |
| amandaj2351 2008-06-13 ch 10, | abusemy button's light blue...but i catch your drift. Oh-my-good gracious--I'm glad Chet's drink was spiked but what about Cassie? I'm dying to know! update soon. |
| Marial79 2008-06-13 ch 10, | abusehey i love ur story so far and i love the sister relationship its soo cute i could just imagine that.lol keep up the great work and update soon! |
| amandaj2351 2008-06-11 ch 9, | abusei liked this chapter. i thought bring chandlers point of view into the picture was a great touch because i was wondering how he dealt with Cassie and Chet. will you have any other POVs? |
| amandaj2351 2008-06-08 ch 8, | abusewow...i really like this story. poor chandler and i can't help but HATE cassie. update soon...i'm definitely putting this in my favorites |
| Sirocco Noh 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abusevery well written - I like it! |
| NikkiTheProcrastinator 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abuseOh. My. God. I love it. :] It's absolutely amazing, I can't wait for more! :] |
| notazombie 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abuseNaz with the review marathon here! I must say, this story has a great deal of potential (it will have other chapters, right?). I'm definitely curious about where that letter of hers will lead! However, one problem: slow down a bit! Show me more about Chet, about Cassie, about Chandler, and especially Carlie! Don't tell me what Winsome is like--show me! Why not add in some of what goes on during school (like her typical interactions with Jordan, Halli, Chandler, Cassie, and maybe even Chet) instead of just saying this is Winsome, this is how it works, this is where Carlie fits in. Also, maybe you should put some more background meat between the Chet IM and the mystery letter? Having those two so close lessens the OOMPH of the second, I think... (Sorry if this comes across as a bit mean. I don't mean it that way at all--it's meant to be a "constructive criticism" type thing) Looking forward to chapter two! -Naz |