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| DaseyFreak 2008-10-06 ch 5,  | abuseWhat an **! He dumps her because she doesnt want to have sex! |
| Leanri 2008-10-06 ch 9, anon. | abuseHi, Liked the story a lot one of the best on the site i have read so far, some small grammar mistakes but overall a very inticing story. good luck |
| reckless fire 2008-10-02 ch 9, | abusethis is a really well detailed story. I enjoyed it. |
| addygale 2008-08-01 ch 9, | abusenice story! a lot of info there! lol! but keep writing stuff like dis! |
| buttercup-love 2008-07-24 ch 9, | abuse:) |
| fishi 2008-07-10 ch 8, anon. | abuseThis story is extremely well written! Keep up the good work :) |
| Brackish Song 2008-07-02 ch 8, | abuseDAMNIT! She seems too sweet and innocent for that jackass! |
| Toxic Panda 2008-06-25 ch 8, | abuseI really like this, because the way he treats her is really the way a guy in a high school would treat a girl. He's not perfect, and he doesn't intend to try. |
| ashleigh 2008-06-02 ch 7, anon. | abuseI really love this so far, it's interesting and pretty realistic. I love that you aren't showing high school in a candy-and-flowers typwe of way, like a lot of young adult writers do. I actually didn't mind the language, it just made the story more credible to me. Please update soon, if you can. |
| Demena 2008-06-01 ch 7, | abusevery good so far...keep it up =) |
| bmwmusicgirl 2008-05-15 ch 7, | abusei like it so far, it's interesting the way you tell it, a little repetitive though... |
| Among-the-Vampires 2008-05-09 ch 7, | abusei really like what i have read so far. it seems like it will be really interesting. maybe when they talk you could possibly put it in dialog...it might flow better for some readers. just a thought. but i still liked the story. so update soon. xD |
| notoriousreviewer 2008-05-09 ch 7, | abuse...I just read some of your reivews and lost a bit more faith in humanity. Oh dear. You know what, I liked it. I think everything in it is valid. A lot of it ** me off because I wish things didn't work that way normally, but I know that's how it goes. And you're good at 2nd person, I don't think there's really anything you need to change. All that aside, I don't think I'm going to continue reading it. It makes me all kinds of angry, but you have my support. |
| babygeek310 2008-04-14 ch 6, | abuseBeautifully written. At first I wasn't sure about having them nameless and using the 2nd person narrative but after readin on a little bit more I can see how it works so well. I hope you're planning on completing this! |
| hades.daemon 2008-03-25 ch 6, | abusehey, still lovin' it! don't be discouraged by all the other reviews, m'kay? |