Hello. :) I loved the story. It really surprised me that you didn't have more reviews. :D I know that you posted so long ago, but I still hope you see this... >.< Overall, I enjoyed the plot and overall flow. It was such a sweet story. I just have a couple comments to make:

1) Misspellings: I noticed misspellings every once in a while such as "her feet were bear" instead of bare in the Epilogue. But the problems were just insignificant, and I was happy with pretty much all the grammar and syntax. :) And I sympathize with you...word processors can't really detect homonyms (spelling? XP)... >.<

2) Length & Flow: I noticed that ooies seemed to mention this as well in her review, but I might as well say it again. I liked the pace of the story in the middle chapters, but in the beginning and later chapters, they story seemed to flow much too quickly. I didn't understand the sudden transition from coffee shop visits to dates on the beach, and I wish you developed a little bit more on the relationship between Jill and Lanie. I think it would provide more insight into her character and draw out the complexity of human emotions more. I was also extremely surprised and lost with the sudden marriage proposal in France (I hope that was the place). It seemed out of place because they had just gotten over a fight. After all, Robbie was even apprehensive to ask Lanie to tour with him. Oh, and Robbie's sudden greatness at playing guitar and singing really surprised me... I wasn't really given an explanation of his talents, and suddenly required to believe in his abilities... It was a rough ride? >.<

3) Characters: I simply love Margaret! What a sweet parent. :D I noticed the note on whether you should have introduced Chris first. I actually liked how you had Robbie introduce his girlfriend to his mother first instead of his best friend. It actually seemed to highlight the special bond between the two as well as Robbie's sweet nature... However, I was disappointed that you removed Lanie's father from the story. I actually liked his involvement in the earlier chapters. He seemed to give a depth to the whole issue of trust. I think you could have actually let him play a larger role in developing Lanie. His infrequent presence could have actually been used to explain the trust and lack of trust that Lanie displays... Then again, it's just a personal preference... ;) And of course, I loved Lanie, Robbie, and Chris. Oh, one more thing about the characters. I really couldn't understand how Jill and Robbie had become such close friends by the end of the story. The story did say that they had shared many conversations during the whole baby conflict with Julia, but I was surprised by the close friendship... Maybe you could elaborate more? But then again, their interactions aren't the main story. >.<

4) Personal Dislikes: Well, all this advice is really my personal opinion, but I guess I'm sticking to the outline form this review seemed to have turned into. ;) I think you may have overstressed Robbie's hate of the media. I mean, it's very understandable, and I completely sympathize with him, but given his personality, it seemed out of character to have such a violent reaction... Then again, this might be just one of his major pet peeves. ;D I disliked the meeting between Robbie and Lanie involving the strawberry shake from Jamba Juice. I love strawberries, and I love shakes, but I didn't like the harsh conversation between the two. Given their earlier friendly if not strained interactions, the harsh words and anger seemed out of place. It came out of the blue, and I started wondering if Lanie was have anger management issues that day. After all, she had run into him and spilled the shake on his shirt, and then she was calling him names... It seemed...out of the blue? O.o Oh, and I hated Travis... Well then again, I guess we are supposed to hate him. But still. D:

5) Digs: I can't praise you enough for this story. I loved how you dealt with a whole Julia situation. Even if it seemed rushed, it turned out well with a quite reasonable fight scene and resolution. I loved the part where Chris answered the phone and Lanie told him to tell Robbie that she loved him. So cute. >.< I also really liked the whole trust thread. Thank you for drawing it through the story and making it tie in with the plot. I thought it lent a deep quality to the whole story... It may be cliched to write a story about a fearful girl from a broken family who meets and amazing guy, but I didn't feel or mind the repetitiveness this time... I loved how you worked it all together.
Again, thank you for an amazing story. I sadly lack the abilities to do anything like that...though I'm trying. >.< I really hope this review made you smile...and was perhaps slightly helpful. I look forward to more goodies from you. :D

its good but short... it only took me like 3ish hours to read the whole thing. i really think you should elaborate more on ... their beginning relationship, her defenses, his own sense of abandonment, and her struggle to get where she is. Also maybe lay-off the iron clad hate of media... after all every time their name is mentioned only helps their career.

I shuttered as though I'd swallowed something bitter.

Shuddered ^^

I bet she can't weight until I'm eighteen

wait

“Calling Dr. Freud,” I muttered. Dr. Morgan ignored me.

Fraud

I think I agree, adding Lanie's father is a huge role and I didn't personally like it the first time around. I'm glad you decided to remove him.

“Woe, slow down! One question at a time, Girl,” Whoa? Or woah? dunno how you would put it. lol

“I’ll give you something to cry about, you wining **!” Whining

sorry for the lack of criticism ;) except for the misspellings lol jk

“Come, you too, there’s something fascinating I want to show you.” needs to be two. Its too chapter-esque too cliff hang-ary. The story should flow chapter to chapter. I think you should change the last sentence and just leave it at "and we didn't care."

Mushy and sentimental isn't a bad thing, and I do like the alterations though I'm not sure how it'll turn out now. I have a feeling you've changed more than I realize. I think you may want to elaborate a little more on the plainness? of her life. OR even the defenses she's built for men. It just seemed to happen really fast.

Hey! I saw you were reposting chappies and I finally got the time to look over some. (I hope you remember me?) Anyway "It wouldn't due to think about that" it should be do not due. and "I scent him another death glare. Robbie chuckled." should be sent. other than that I didn't really see anything I thought needed improving on. =)

Poor Lanie! I know how I would feel if I were in her situation. I thought it was a good chapter! Can't wiat for the next one! :)

YAY! Thank you SO much for not making Robbie a father! Update soon please! :D

Anyone else think after all her manipulation Rob was really stupid to kiss her again...

I really hope Julia is lying about this being Robbie's child. I'm so so upset. I've come to love Robbie and Lanie and now this... Lanie is going to be upset. Oh, well. I have very much faith in your writing skills and this story. Can't wait to see what happens! :)

Oh, Robbie how could you cheat on Lanie? I'm highly dissapointed in Robbie. Anyway, good chapter! I can't wait to see how he handles the situation! Update soon please! :)

Good story. Can't believe you don't have more reviews.

I suppose the basic premise has probably been done many times over, but I love love love this story! You really are a gifted writer. Please continue, I'm waiting anxiously to see what happens next!