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| Mystic and Masochistic 2008-06-15 ch 1,  | abuseThat's really sad! I think it makes sense, but I can see where it may not to some people. ~Isabel |
| Kiss.Today.Goodbye 2008-03-14 ch 1, | abuseI liked this piece and I think it is well-written and well-structured already. In the second verse I think the rhythm of the last line might be slightly off. The third verse was really good because I think it conveyed an idea everyone can understand, because it really happens. Maybe people say things because when they're confused that's easier? Anyway, sad but good. Well done. - (courtesy of the review game - and thanks for reviewing me.) |
| Written 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abuseaww, I think it's a good poem. |
| simpleplan13 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abuseI like this... the rhyming is nice and it's something we can all relate to... in the second to last stanza though... you ave you never and then you will never.. the tenses there didnt match.. oter than that it's a really nice piece PS If your bored check out the Review Game and its Review Marathon (links in my profile) |
| xxInsanityxx 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abuseaw... i love this poem... the only thing is "But I guess the truth/I couldn’t see" i really did not understand, it kinda broke the flow of the poem maybe you could do "But I guess the truth/ That I couldn't see" or something, other then that, it was amazing, keep writing!! luv ya (P.S. Snuffles says meow =)) ~xxInsanityxx |
| 123454321 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abuseThe rhyming bellies the serious undertone of this piece in a good way; I enjoyed the sing-song feel. I think the story was pretty straightforward; easy to understand. I thought the line 'watched me die' was somewhat overdramatic, but then that's what love does. -J.A. Courtesy of the review marathon (link on profile). |